Before & After: Tighter

 

This text, ironically, comes from a 1,700-word article on writing shorter emails.

The simple solution to a shorter email is to leave out the needless parts, as Strunk and White says.

Before:

“There are plenty of other benefits to writing short emails as well. If you send someone a very long email, there is a very good chance that they will put your email into some kind of ‘reply later’ folder, where it may just rot with the other long-forgotten emails in their inbox, meaning you either won’t get a reply, or may not get one as quickly as you would have liked.

“And writing short emails is a skill. Writing short anything is a skill. If you keep your emails concise, people will come to recognize that very skill in the crafting of your email’s succinct message. In today’s world, people value clarity and brevity more than ever. They read their emails on their mobile devices;  while waiting at traffic lights or on public transport, and really [ they ] don’t want to be scrolling down page after page, while you ramble on.”

 

After

There are other benefits to writing short email. People tend to put long emails aside for later, which means you may not get a reply quickly, or ever. Besides, they will often be reading your email on a mobile phone. They don’t want to scroll through an endless and rambling message.